SaltandPretzels Posted September 12, 2016 Share Posted September 12, 2016 "You can not have her , you bastard! " She screamed at me , while pointing the gun at me. Her face once full of life , is just an shallow reminder of former self. Her addiction to drugs, made her something monstrous, something out of an vampire book. She had lost her weight dramaticly, I am beggining to concern that if she shots she will break her wrist with the recoil. " It's your fault you sick son of a B***ch" She once again said "Listen Bekka, I don't care about what happens to you, I am not on some gruesome revenge trip. I need only my daughter, tell me where she is and I can leave you in peace." She lowered her gun a little bit, but her eyes were still full of rage. She blames me again, for her addictions, for her misfortunes. Rebbecah believes I am here to kill her, due to how she treated my daughter, how she had bribed judge in order to get custody over daughter. She was clean then, at least for a little while. "You never find he- " She couldn't finish because I tackled her, when she was on the ground , I wrestled out the pistol , quickly got up and started pointing at her. " Now tell me where is she? Where is Ashley?" I tried to be calm as I can, but it was really hard to resist the temptation to kick her teeth out. She looked at me for a few seconds as if considering all her options, few seconds felt like hours. And finally she broke the silence. " He took her, that f****ing bastard took her. " She started to sob. "He was looking for you, " "Who took her?!! " - I screamed at her. "I can't ... I can't ... . " "Listen Bekka , Just listen goddamnit. You need to tell me who took her and where she is , I will find her and keep her safe Tell me!!!'" She muttered only one word "Castle Point" . I went cold, I knew this place all to well and now I know who is looking for me, the devil came for my daughter , and invited to join him in hell. Ten years had passed since I was an inmate at Castle Point, and now he wants me back . End of Prologue. I am sorry for my writing , I am not native english speaker but I tried to my best , more chapters will come. If you like it please comment. I propably improve grammar mistakes later, right now it's midnight here, so have a nice sleep. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheWraithPlayer Posted September 16, 2016 Share Posted September 16, 2016 On 9/12/2016 at 5:10 PM, SaltandPretzels said: "You can not have her , you bastard! " She screamed at me , while pointing the gun at me. Her face once full of life , is just an shallow reminder of former self. Her addiction to drugs, made her something monstrous, something out of an vampire book. She had lost her weight dramaticly, I am beggining to concern that if she shots she will break her wrist with the recoil. " It's your fault you sick son of a B***ch" She once again said "Listen Bekka, I don't care about what happens to you, I am not on some gruesome revenge trip. I need only my daughter, tell me where she is and I can leave you in peace." She lowered her gun a little bit, but her eyes were still full of rage. She blames me again, for her addictions, for her misfortunes. Rebbecah believes I am here to kill her, due to how she treated my daughter, how she had bribed judge in order to get custody over daughter. She was clean then, at least for a little while. "You never find he- " She couldn't finish because I tackled her, when she was on the ground , I wrestled out the pistol , quickly got up and started pointing at her. " Now tell me where is she? Where is Ashley?" I tried to be calm as I can, but it was really hard to resist the temptation to kick her teeth out. She looked at me for a few seconds as if considering all her options, few seconds felt like few hours. And finally she broke the silence. " He took her, that f****ing bastard took her. " She started to sob. "He was looking for you, " "Who took her?!! " - I screamed at her. "I can't ... I can't ... . " "Listen Bekka , Just listen goddamnit. You need to tell me who took her and where she is , I will find her and keep her safe Tell me!!!'" She muttered only one word "Castle Point" . I went cold, I knew this place all to well and now I know who is looking for me, the devil came for my daughter , and ask me to join him in hell. Castle Point is an prison, where I spend 10 years of my life. And now he wants me back. End of Prologue. I am sorry for my writing , I am not native english speaker buy I tried to my best , more chapters will come. If you like it please comment. I propably improve grammar mistakes later, right now it's midnight here, so have a nice sleep. Huh, interesting. Is this going to be a apocalyptic dystopian story or a horror one, though? (or a kind of combo deal like Steven Kings The Stand. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SaltandPretzels Posted September 17, 2016 Author Share Posted September 17, 2016 14 hours ago, TheWraithPlayer said: Huh, interesting. Is this going to be a apocalyptic dystopian story or a horror one, though? (or a kind of combo deal like Steven Kings The Stand. I was aiming for horror / adventure. And I must admit the man who is looking for a protaganist is inspired by Randall Flagg. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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