Jump to content

Trying to write a song


Ironfist56

Recommended Posts

Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles :D  I was inspired to write one about killing wind gods when i was walking home from college being attacked by wind. My hair was flying in my mouth (yes I am a dude) My pizza was being rained on and going from being hot to horribly cold, and my headphones kept cutting out. So I have to decided to channel my anger of the wind into a song about a dude called Jeremiah killing wind gods. I wouldn't mind a bit of help as I am not sure if the verses seem to flow very well (or any of it for that matter) I'm not exactly an experienced song writer, In fact this is probably the 3rd song I've properly tried to write without just giving up. Tips on how to write songs and how to improve this one would be much appreciated!

 

The song is called Jeremiah Windkiller;

 

My people my people this is your lord speaking

come to the keep

outside is not safe for sleeping

The gods of wind

have come to wreak havoc

you have no chance of withstanding

 

Before he could finish the wind took its first gust

houses were crushed

half the city was bust

Jeremiah ran to the keep

but he was blown backwards

he looked to the sky and saw a mysterious figure standing

 

Jeremiah

You must be the wind killer

it’s caused too much death

destroy its very pillars

you are the one

and you cannot stop

till the wind is completely

dead and gone

 

He climbed to his feet

and held out his hand

and small insects came like a fleet

and in his hand

formed an all mighty blade

light as a feather

but deadly as a grenade

 

He looked to his front

And the wind God Fujin he saw

He readied himself

as the god came to confront

he readied his sword

 

Jeremiah

You must be the wind killer

it’s caused too much death

destroy its very pillars

you are the one

and you cannot stop

till the wind is completely

dead and gone

 
Link to comment
Share on other sites

He looked to his front

And the wind God Fujin he saw

He readied himself

as the god came to confront

he readied his sword

 

i don't know much about japanese culture, but maybe it's importand whether it's a good god or not. because if the japanese really like the god, you may get some hate for "killing" him.

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles :D

héhé, I personally am at the total opposite, I can't write story-telling songs for the sake of story telling, I need to write about serious real stuff and try to touch some kind of universal truth to share with people or on the contrary some really personnal feelings... tho I'm a rather jolly fellow on a day to day basis ;p

But I gotta write about stuffs that bother me, sadden me, anger me, point the absurd, or stuffs I find beautiful and carry me away.

Cool song you're writting tho, hope you'll post the final version if you ever record it :)

Link to comment
Share on other sites

 

He looked to his front

And the wind God Fujin he saw

He readied himself

as the god came to confront

he readied his sword

 

i don't know much about japanese culture, but maybe it's importand whether it's a good god or not. because if the japanese really like the god, you may get some hate for "killing" him.

 

 

I didn't really think of this, how ignorant of me!

 

I will look into it, and if needed I suppose I can switch it out for a Nordic, Greek or Roman God, I don't think they're as bothered  :mrgreen:

 

Well, you're fine with a little background music and a good battery you list, is not very difficult to make the song the point is to have dedication and a good idea of what I see, you're on track.

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SLdkVaQ63G4&index=5&list=PL22AAADD0B6E3E97D

 

these subjects were able to compose a song with just youtube comments.

 

I like that, that was impressive! Thanks for your opinion, I have a few riffs that I'm working on I just gotta make them fit with the song correctly! Cheers mate!

 

 

 

Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles :D

héhé, I personally am at the total opposite, I can't write story-telling songs for the sake of story telling, I need to write about serious real stuff and try to touch some kind of universal truth to share with people or on the contrary some really personnal feelings... tho I'm a rather jolly fellow on a day to day basis ;p

But I gotta write about stuffs that bother me, sadden me, anger me, point the absurd, or stuffs I find beautiful and carry me away.

Cool song you're writting tho, hope you'll post the final version if you ever record it :)

 

 

Yeah I understand man! I am awful about writing about feelings  ;-) And of course I post it, probably just after Christmas  :mrgreen:

Link to comment
Share on other sites

Archived

This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.

×
×
  • Create New...