Ironfist56 Posted December 12, 2014 Share Posted December 12, 2014 Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles I was inspired to write one about killing wind gods when i was walking home from college being attacked by wind. My hair was flying in my mouth (yes I am a dude) My pizza was being rained on and going from being hot to horribly cold, and my headphones kept cutting out. So I have to decided to channel my anger of the wind into a song about a dude called Jeremiah killing wind gods. I wouldn't mind a bit of help as I am not sure if the verses seem to flow very well (or any of it for that matter) I'm not exactly an experienced song writer, In fact this is probably the 3rd song I've properly tried to write without just giving up. Tips on how to write songs and how to improve this one would be much appreciated! The song is called Jeremiah Windkiller; My people my people this is your lord speakingcome to the keepoutside is not safe for sleepingThe gods of wind have come to wreak havocyou have no chance of withstanding Before he could finish the wind took its first gusthouses were crushedhalf the city was bustJeremiah ran to the keepbut he was blown backwardshe looked to the sky and saw a mysterious figure standing JeremiahYou must be the wind killerit’s caused too much deathdestroy its very pillarsyou are the oneand you cannot stoptill the wind is completely dead and gone He climbed to his feetand held out his handand small insects came like a fleetand in his hand formed an all mighty bladelight as a featherbut deadly as a grenade He looked to his frontAnd the wind God Fujin he sawHe readied himselfas the god came to confronthe readied his sword JeremiahYou must be the wind killerit’s caused too much deathdestroy its very pillarsyou are the oneand you cannot stoptill the wind is completely dead and gone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atoxwarrior Posted December 13, 2014 Share Posted December 13, 2014 Well, you're fine with a little background music and a good battery you list, is not very difficult to make the song the point is to have dedication and a good idea of what I see, you're on track. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SLdkVaQ63G4&index=5&list=PL22AAADD0B6E3E97D these subjects were able to compose a song with just youtube comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cdr.Keen Posted December 13, 2014 Share Posted December 13, 2014 He looked to his frontAnd the wind God Fujin he sawHe readied himselfas the god came to confronthe readied his sword i don't know much about japanese culture, but maybe it's importand whether it's a good god or not. because if the japanese really like the god, you may get some hate for "killing" him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deprav Posted December 13, 2014 Share Posted December 13, 2014 Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles héhé, I personally am at the total opposite, I can't write story-telling songs for the sake of story telling, I need to write about serious real stuff and try to touch some kind of universal truth to share with people or on the contrary some really personnal feelings... tho I'm a rather jolly fellow on a day to day basis ;pBut I gotta write about stuffs that bother me, sadden me, anger me, point the absurd, or stuffs I find beautiful and carry me away.Cool song you're writting tho, hope you'll post the final version if you ever record it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ironfist56 Posted December 14, 2014 Author Share Posted December 14, 2014 He looked to his frontAnd the wind God Fujin he sawHe readied himselfas the god came to confronthe readied his sword i don't know much about japanese culture, but maybe it's importand whether it's a good god or not. because if the japanese really like the god, you may get some hate for "killing" him. I didn't really think of this, how ignorant of me! I will look into it, and if needed I suppose I can switch it out for a Nordic, Greek or Roman God, I don't think they're as bothered Well, you're fine with a little background music and a good battery you list, is not very difficult to make the song the point is to have dedication and a good idea of what I see, you're on track. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SLdkVaQ63G4&index=5&list=PL22AAADD0B6E3E97D these subjects were able to compose a song with just youtube comments. I like that, that was impressive! Thanks for your opinion, I have a few riffs that I'm working on I just gotta make them fit with the song correctly! Cheers mate! Hello, So basically I'm trying to write a song for my grunge/metal project. I want to write songs that have some really random cool story. I think I'm too much of a happy person to write songs about real life troubles héhé, I personally am at the total opposite, I can't write story-telling songs for the sake of story telling, I need to write about serious real stuff and try to touch some kind of universal truth to share with people or on the contrary some really personnal feelings... tho I'm a rather jolly fellow on a day to day basis ;pBut I gotta write about stuffs that bother me, sadden me, anger me, point the absurd, or stuffs I find beautiful and carry me away.Cool song you're writting tho, hope you'll post the final version if you ever record it Yeah I understand man! I am awful about writing about feelings And of course I post it, probably just after Christmas Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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